the area's south of the Han River/ the area's north of the Han River
After 1960's, it was developed with the new place where the south of the Han River in Seoul, and then the area’s value has risen gradually. The south of the Han River has developed like a modern city. On the other hand the north of the Han River has developed like a traditional culture. I will explain the differences of both areas of the Han River. And I will search both areas similarities that should have developing together in Seoul.
There are many differences between the culture of south and the north of the Han River in Seoul. It seems like to have the difference of the cultures between Seoul and localities. First of all, because of being made new circumstance in south by intentionally; the straight roads, convenience new apartments, good training institutes and various cultural facilities, the south of the Han River is more popular than the north of the Han River. Also as the part of the global business, COEX, international convention center, lots of first-rate hotel, and Teheran Road located in many big scale buildings, are located in the south of the Han River. The south is more international than the north of the Han River.
Another difference is that two areas differ from the educational environment. The south of the Han River has more various institutes than the north of the Han River. As those of the south have the detail programs that are adjusted for student’s level. The south is superior to the north in a teacher’s ability too. In according to recent report, the middle school students’ English score in the south is higher than that in the north. In the south a middle school’s average score is 97. This is higher by 13 to 10 than Seoul average(87), Pusan average(85) ,and Deagu average(84). In the north B middle school’s average score(82) is lower by 15 than in the south's that. The third differences, as a result of in this education environment, two areas have been widening the distinction of the housing price. Even though in the same condition, the south’s house is sold even more expensive than the north’s.
But there are also similarities that should have developing between the south of the Han River and the north of the Han River in Seoul. I think, two areas will try to balance the difference of the culture’s merits. Each of two cultures has some unique. The south has a character of modern city. And the north has a character of the historical and traditional city. Recently, as the city government official’s real estate policy that will develop in the north, the north’s house price is higher than the former’s that. The north’s Yongsan, and Ganghwamun will be changed into the business area like Teheran Road. It is necessary to remodel their unique culture and to adjust to new changed situation. To be attractive Seoul, both areas should be to make up for the weak points in the present condition and to develop for the unique of cultures
There are many differences and a few similarity in the south of Han River and north of Han River. Although two areas have some differences, the gap of the both become narrow more and more. Repeatly, it is getting closer to both areas that had the gap of culture, educational circumstance and real estate. And then both areas will be in harmony with their different culture. It is one of the method that the identity of Seoul's brand will be made.
Sunday, May 25, 2008
the south of the Han River/ the north of the Han River
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Hi, Amy
Your essay is so good and giving the vivid picture of life in seoul comapared northern part to southern area of han river. Main point on your essay tells a positive point of view even though there are so big gap between north and south part of River.
I can only find some mistakes
the south of the Han River/ the north of the Han River
At the first paragraph " it was developed with the new place" it looks like missing subject. In "then the area’s value was being risen gradually" was being risen need to be passive. So, it could be better to use "has risen" .
The south of the Han River has been developing like the(a) modern city.
On the other hand the north of the Han River has been developing like the "traditional culture" what is this?
. I will explain the differences of both areas of the Han River. And I will search both areas similarities that should "have developing" together in Seoul.
It need to be other form of Verb.
It seems like to have the difference of the cultures between Seoul and regions. what's regions?
First of all, because of being made new circumstance in south by intentionally; the straight road(s), convenience new apartments, good training institutes and various culture(cultural) facilities, the south of the Han River is more popularity(popular) than the north of the Han River. Also in(as) the part of the global business, COEX, international convention center, lots of first-rate hotel, (and) Teheran Road located in many big scale offices(buildings), are located in the south of the Han River. The south is more international than the north of the Han River.Another difference is that two areas differ from the educational environment. The south of the Han River has more various institutes than the north of the Han River. As those of the south have the detail programs that is(are) adjusted for student’s level. The south is superior to the north in a teacher’s ability too. In according to recently(recent) report, the middle school students's English score in the south is higher than that in the north. (In)The south a middle school’s average score is 97. This is higher from (by) 13 to 10 than Seoul average(87), Pusan average(85), (and) Deagu average(84). (in) The north B middle school’s average score(82) is lower (by) 15 than that (of) in the south('s that). As a result (of) in education environment, a third difference(?, The), two areas have been widening the distinction of the housing price. Even though in the same condition, the south’s house is sold even more expensive than the north’s.But there are also similarities that should have (been) developing between the south of the Han River and the north of the Han River in Seoul. I think, two areas will try to balance the difference of the culture’s merits.
(The-remove) each of the culture has an unique (something, or is ). The south has a character of modern city. On the other hand, the north has a character of the historical and traditional city. Recently, in the government official’s real estate policy, the north is higher than the south. (And) the north’s Yongsan,(and) Ganghwamun will be changed into the business area like Teheran Road. It is necessary to remodel their unique culture and to adjust to new changed situation. To be attractive Seoul, both areas should be to make up for the weak points in the present condition and to develope for the cultures’ unique.There are many difficulties and a little similarities(not plural) in the south of Han River and north of Han River. Although two areas have (a) differences, the gap of the both become narrow more and more. Repeatly, it is more close(closer) to both areas that the gap of culture, educational circumstance and real estate. After,(?) the north’s grows is getting in a moment. And then both areas will be (in) harmony with their different culture. It is (one of) the method that the identity of Seoul's brand will be made.
I pointed out lots of things in your writing. But you can make it on our way.
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